Long, long ago when I was first starting to write, I came across a story in the newspaper about a girl who flew her kite at a park. A plane flew by and the kite snagged on it and up she went. I thought, what if she went for a plane ride while holding onto her kite. What a great adventure! And how would she get down? Via a circus tent, of course! And guess who became the star of the circus show?
I wrote what was first called Katie's Kite Ride in poetry form and it began like this:
Up high
in the sky
Katie flies her kite.
Plane low
Ut-oh.
Something isn't right.
Both my agent and I loved it and so did some publishers, but not enough to make an offer. So over the years I revised, she sent it out, and we still haven't placed it.
We tried to submit it with illustrations to show how wonderful the text and art could be married. Sylvia Kantorowitz, the illustrator for my book, Go to Bed, Monster!, was experimenting with a new style using Post-it notes and she applied it to Katie's story.
Still didn't sell.
We put our heads together and tried to figure out why it wasn't selling. Heart. "It needs, heart!" said my agent, Linda Pratt. It couldn't be just an adventure. It had to tug at not only the kite strings, but the heart strings.
So I rewrote it as a separation story, where Katie gets separated from her father via the kite and then they are safely reunited at the end. It is now called Hold on Tight and it's available for publication. Here's it is!
Hold on Tight!
by Natasha Wing
Windy day
Let’s play
At the city park.
Brings kite
Red and white
And their doggy Spark.
Up high
In the sky
Katie flies her kite.
String slips
Kite dips
Dad says Hold on tight!
Plane low (small plane with banner reading, Circus Today!)
Uh-oh!
Flight paths set to cross.
Pilot stares
Katie glares
She’ll show him who’s boss.
Kite snags
Plane drags
Katie pulled along.
Hold tight
Little kite
Hope your string is strong.
Plane faster
Green pasture
Horses whinny, NEIGH!
Barn smells
Father yells
“Fall into the hay!”
Not yet
They jet
Heading for the town.
Katie sails
Lady wails,
“Someone get her down!”
Firemen
Five, no ten
Running to and fro.
Plane tips
Katie flips
Spark barks down below.
Plane loops
Katie swoops
Stunt show jamboree.
Plane stalls
Free falls
Katie cries out, “Wheee!”
Crowd parts
Engine starts
Circles a big tent.
Plane slow
LET GO! (dad yells)
Wonder where she went?
Tent rips
Heart skips
Heading for the ring.
Clowns galore
Lions roar
Grabs the trapeze swing.
Spotlight
Follows flight
Katie steals the show!
Star now
Takes a bow
Crowd cheers out, “BRAVO!”
Loud bark
Here, Spark!
Everything’s all right.
Big hug,
Hearts tug,
Dad says, Hold me tight.
If you are a publisher looking for a heartwarming story with simple text, contact my agent, Linda Pratt, at Wernick & Pratt at (845) 831-2639. A print out version is attached.
If you're an artist wanting to practice illustrating a book, feel free to illustrate my text. Contact my agent for permission rights if you do want to sell your artwork with my text.
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